Comments on: Swallow http://www.toadinmud.co.uk/poetry/swallow/ Poetry and Prose for Modern Times Fri, 25 Jul 2008 05:26:18 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.5.1 By: Patrick http://www.toadinmud.co.uk/poetry/swallow/#comment-160 Patrick Mon, 22 Jan 2007 11:10:54 +0000 http://www.toadinmud.co.uk/2006/11/27/going-out/#comment-160 Anyway Tom isn't a Geordie. He's too posh. I think its a bit desperate. Anyway Tom isn’t a Geordie. He’s too posh.
I think its a bit desperate.

]]> By: jackgander http://www.toadinmud.co.uk/poetry/swallow/#comment-158 jackgander Mon, 22 Jan 2007 06:04:50 +0000 http://www.toadinmud.co.uk/2006/11/27/going-out/#comment-158 I like the first line. I like the first line.

]]> By: dma http://www.toadinmud.co.uk/poetry/swallow/#comment-148 dma Sat, 13 Jan 2007 11:34:16 +0000 http://www.toadinmud.co.uk/2006/11/27/going-out/#comment-148 There's loads I like about this. I love the homely details - the aunties' co-op clothes, the 3 for 5 pound retro H&M socks, "you bet me ... that the glass-collector is up for some." Great idiomatic stuff. And I could have told you were a Geordie from the last line alone, but giving "but" its own last line is a master-stroke. I have to say I found the images of night-club life disturbing, but my night-club days are way beyond me. And my children's are ahead. Now that is disturbing. There’s loads I like about this. I love the homely details - the aunties’ co-op clothes, the 3 for 5 pound retro H&M socks, “you bet me … that
the glass-collector is up for some.” Great idiomatic stuff.

And I could have told you were a Geordie from the last line alone, but giving “but” its own last line is a master-stroke.

I have to say I found the images of night-club life disturbing, but my night-club days are way beyond me. And my children’s are ahead. Now that is disturbing.

]]> By: James Fountain http://www.toadinmud.co.uk/poetry/swallow/#comment-55 James Fountain Sun, 03 Dec 2006 23:42:07 +0000 http://www.toadinmud.co.uk/2006/11/27/going-out/#comment-55 The alliteration and assonance in this poem stitch together the sordid character to a horrific T. A great angry thunder-cloud of a poem, tinged with irony. The alliteration and assonance in this poem stitch together the sordid character to a horrific T. A great angry thunder-cloud of a poem, tinged with irony.

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